Man, out of the three papers I'm putting in I guess I would say that my personal analysis paper best demonstrates my writing capability so far. I think that as of now, some of my better analysis has come out and it has been easier to express something that relates directly to my life. I also like the direction I am taking with my paper, showing how both Martha and I started at the bottom and how because of our situations we have beterred ourselves and become stronger because of it. With something so emotional, it has been easier to capture my audience. On the other hand, I think that my research paper needs the most revision because I am lacking the ever-important outside contextual evidence. Instead of writing a paper about "The Simpsons," I need to show how it has made an impact in the American society. It has taken me a while to really get a clear focus for my research paper but I think as I start adding real world proof it will help flesh out unecessary parts of my paper.
One of my biggest weaknesses in all of my papers is delving into the analysis and not just touching on the surface. I need to work on really trying to explain and prove my argument rather than just talking about it. Darn 5-paragraph essays! I also need to work on the flow of my writing, making sure that everything connects and works with together instead of feeling choppy. I want to eliminate any awkwardness and make my papers easy to read.
I totally know what you mean about getting your audience to be emotionally involved with your personal analysis. But for some reason, because it is so personal I have had the problem of over thinking it, so it has probably given me the most trouble. As far as your research paper goes, have you had any luck finding that essential outside info? I might have some data from my soc class that could help. Besides that, I found that finding outside information was difficult in my research paper as well. I really lucked out with having a sociology class that is all about how and why society is the way it is. So, keep up the good work and I will see you Tuesday!
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